Firebrand Risk
Breeching Halcyon Hall
May 31, 2024
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Bennett School for Girls, Halcyon Hall

Panel 1. Halcyon Hall, Millbrook, New York, nighttime. The windows glow with light. The shrubbery able to be seen is tidy. The building exudes stateliness and warmth.

Panel 2. Babette de Benedetto—late teens—is kneeling, pressed up against the stone wall of Halcyon Hall. Her curly, black hair is knotted in a bun. She wears trousers and a long-sleeved blouse, but a short, black cape covers most of her torso.

Panel 3. Babette holds a Colt pistol, pointing it down at the ground.

Panel 4. Arlene crouches next to Babette. She wears the same short, black cape as Babette, but is wearing the hood. Arlene has a strained, worried expression.

Arlene

The rest of campus is dark. It must only be the coven awake.

Panel 5. Arlene’s blue eyes widen in fright.

Arlene

Is that your father’s pistol?

Panel 6. Babette pulls on her hood.

Babette

Stay at my back.

Panel 7. Arlene grabs the end of Babette’s cape to stop her from fully standing.

Arlene

You mustn’t!

Babette

There is no other choice.

Arlene

But, Babette…

Babette

They should well know the consequences!

Panel 8. Babette stands, hand on the doorhandle ready to enter.

Babette (v.o.)

I gladly would leave this to others—

Panel 9. Babette charges through the door, gun drawn. Arlene follows with one hand out and the other clutching the gem hanging around her neck.

Babette (v.o. continue)

—but then I wouldn’t make a good leader.

Panel 10. A college-aged girl in black appears. Her outstretched hand has a chunky ring with a jewel on it. Her hand is glowing as if made of embers.

Panel 11. Babette squares herself and pulls the trigger.

Panel 12. The witch falls back, dead.

Panel 13. Arlene appears petrified. Babette is standing resolute, but her hand shakes.

Babette

They’ll be aware of us now. Stay guarded.

Panel 14. Arlene keeps her terrified expression.

Arlene

You killed…. This is too much. We cannot fight the whole Halcyon Coven just us two!

Panel 15. Babette grabs her wrist to steady her gun hand.

Babette

They mean to wipe us out. We had little choice.

Panel 16. They raced through the dimly lit, stately hall with Babette in the lead. Her gun stayed down while Arlene kept her pose with one hand up and one clutching her necklace. There are sounds of several people moving erratically upstairs, some shouts to alert others.

Panel 17. Babette shoots a witch on the stairs as she heads up. Arlene is facing the ground floor, blasting another witch off her feet with a slice of wind.

Panel 18. Babette glanced over her shoulder.

Babette

Don’t leave any alive!

Arlene

I cannot! That’s too far!

Panel 19. A fireball blasts apart a door at the top of the stairs, sending Babette stumbling down a few steps. The coven Matriarch—aged in her sixties with her hair and clothes stereotypical of a school marm—is framed by the destroyed doorway with her hand like embers.

Panel 20. Babette’s hood is off due to the blast. She glares at the Matriarch.

Panel 21. The Matriarch glares back.

Matriarch

It’s the de Benedetto Coven! Raid! It’s a raid!

Panel 22. Babette rushed towards the Matriarch.

Panel 23. Babette shoots once, twice, but the Matriarch deflects both with a mostly invisible shield.

Panel 24. Babette dives down, shooting low.

Panel 25. The Matriarch yelps, faltering, as the bullet rips the hem of her long dress, blasting the wooden floor.

Panel 26. Babette rolls towards the Matriarch, firing another shot. The Matriarch has already rushed from the path, swinging her hand down at the floor.

Panel 27. The floor splinters in a jagged line towards Babette.

Panel 28. Babette rips off her capelet, grips an Italian cameo pinned to her shirt, and throws her hand towards the floor. The line abruptly stops like slamming into an invisible wall.

Panel 29. The Matriarch’s face twists.

Matriarch

Secure the witchboy! Stop that little witch!

Panel 30. The Matriarch sneers.

Matriarch

Leave me to handle Babette.

Panel 31. Babette tucks the pistol away, glancing down towards Arlene.

Babette

Run, Arlene! Find him!

Panel 32. Babette holds out a hand like a shield, the other gripping the cameo. Arlene races off, still on the ground floor and trailed by two witches.

Panel 33. The Matriarch adjusts the clunky, gemmed bracelet on her wrist.

Babette (v.o.)

She is too practiced to tip her hand. She means to bait me to attack first.

Panel 34. Babette’s hand clutching the cameo glows.

Babette (v.o. continue)

So be it.

Panel 35. Babette clasps her hands together, pulling and swirling them apart to gather particles in the air.

Panel 36. The air between Babette’s hands turns smoky and sickly hued.

Panel 37. The Matriarch’s eyes widen fearfully; she steps back and starts to rapidly, repeatedly, draw a circle over her head.

38. Babette pulls her hands apart and disperses the smoky, sickly air towards the Matriarch. A gentle drizzle started over the Matriarch’s head, but she was now coughing.

39. Babette pulls her broach off her shirt and draws a line down her arm with the pin. A line of hot, glowing light follows the path.

Babette

Return my brother, and this ends.

40. The Matriarch snarls. Lightning is sparking on her fingertips. She is not coughing anymore, now sopping wet from the drizzle dispersing over her head.

41. The glowing light spreads across Babette’s arms, looking like lava and embers. The sparks on the Matriarch’s fingers look weak and dull in comparison. A hint of frustration over this is on her old face.

42. The Matriarch struck first this time, sending a jagged bolt of electricity directly towards Babette’s face.

43. Babette blocked with her arm, the magma light brightening as she absorbed the brunt of the magic. Babette clenched her teeth and winced as the residue electricity raced over her, static’ng her curls.

44. Babette counters with throwing a handful of glowing, hot rocks at the Matriarch with one hand, following with a blast of heat from her other.

45. The Matriarch waved her hand, deflecting the hot air. A burst of steam hisses as the rocks hit a wavering water shield.

46. The Matriarch shrieks as the rocks pepper her, knocking her to a knee.

47. Babette steps closer, burning brightly, and with more glowing rocks dancing in her hand. She is staring down at the Matriarch.

Babette

You should have returned my brother.

48. The Matriarch grits her teeth, flicking her hands.

49. The Matriarch stares at her hands in shock.

50. The Matriarch stares up at Babette with more fear than defiance as Babette’s shadow crosses over her.

51. Babette’s expression is grim as her flames light her face, the Matriarch’s cries and shrieks deafening.

52. Babette dashes off, pinning her broach back to her shirt. Over her shoulder is the charred remains of the Matriarch, still kneeling in place. The blackened floor is crumbling beneath her.

53. Babette is drained, sweat on her brow and hands shaking. She rests against a wall and hold her hand out.

54. Babette’s hand flickers a glow, dies, and leaves her with a pained expression.

Babette (v.o.)

I over exerted.

55. Babette checks the gun’s magazine.

Babette (v.o. continue)

I’ll need to reload next encounter.

56. Babette runs off.

Babette (v.o. continue)

I hope Arlene is safe.

57. Babette skids to a halt and ducks behind the corner she nearly clears.

58. Three witches loiter outside a wooden door, murmuring inaudibly. They appear bored and sleepy.

59. Babette’s face lights with excitement and relief.

Babette (v.o. continue)

There you are!

60. Babette steels herself, exhaling and holding the pistol ready.

61. Babette whips around the corner and fires.

62. The middle witch yelps as the bullet rips into her shoulder. The two others stare at her in puzzlement, defenses half-raised.

63. Babette drops the empty magazine, shoving a fresh one in place. She is still moving forward, zigzagging.

64. Babette fires again and hits the left witch squarely through the neck. The right witch is fully on defense. The middle witch is still crying and holding her shoulder.

65. Babette winces as the right witch lashes out, slicing her upper arm with a bright, mint green energy. Babette fires and hits the right witch just as the slice hits her arm.

66. The middle witch disappears inside the door they had been guarding.

67. Babette bursts through the door after her.

68. The room was a bathroom with three stalls and three sinks.

69. Babette looks at the tiled floor.

70. Blood droplets.

71. Babette keeps her pistol up near her shoulders, creeping along the blood trail.

72. Babette stops outside the last stall, at the end of the blood trail. Muffled, sobbing, wheezing is coming from inside.

73. Babette kicks open the door.

Babette

Where is the witchboy?

74. Babette pulls the trigger before the witch waves her hand or opens her mouth.

75. Babette storms into the hall, gun poised.

76. Babette runs up a floor.

77. The floor is empty, darkened, and full of closed doors. There is eerie creaking sounding throughout the hall.

78. Babette remove her broach, squeezing it hard enough for the pin to puncture her hand.

79. Blood droplet hits the wooden floor.

Babette (o.s.)

Truvari. Frati.

[Find. Brother.]

80. Babette falls against the wall, breathing hard. The blood droplet on the floor glows, and a thin line of light stretches from it.

81. Babette grits her teeth and staggers down the hall.

82. Babette turns a corner. Indistinct murmuring reaches her ears.

83. Babette squares against the door, taking a deep breath.

84. Babette taps the door with the gun, waits.

85. The doorknob twists. Babette kicks it, knocking it inward and toppling the witch on the other side.

86. The room beyond the door was a small dorm with two beds. Four witches were in the room; three sitting in the middle of the room and one fallen over near the door. The three in the middle were surrounding a boy of fourteen that greatly resembles Babette (olive skinned, brown eyes, thick and curly black hair—short).

87. One witch sitting on the floor was holding a bloody knife. The witch behind the boy was forcing his arm out. There was a cut dribbling blood on his forearm.

88. Babette’s eyes blaze.

Babette

Zinnia, down!

89. Babette shoots the witch behind Zinnia, and the one with the knife. The third on the floor is lunging for a wand on the nightside table.

90. Babette rounds on the third witch.

Zinnia (o.s.)

Babs, watch out!

91. Babette is knocked back by the door smashing into her. She fires into the ceiling in her disruption. The fourth witch is readying a wand while bracing against the door.

92. Babette shoots through the wooden door. First shot skims the fourth witch’s shoulder, eliciting a surprised yelp. Second shot pierces her, dropping her.

93. Babette shoulders the door, shoving the body aside and opening the door wider.

94. Babette shrieks and drops to a knee as a surge of electricity hits her.

95. The last witch holds her wand steady with one hand. Her other hand is bloody and gripping Zinnia’s arm. There is a smear of blood over her mouth. Her eyes are dilated.

96. Babette shakily raises the pistol off the ground, pulling the trigger despite it not lining up with the witch. It clicks empty.

97. Babette tucks the gun away and grabs her cameo with a trembling hand. Her breathing is jagged.

College Witch (o.s.)

[pained shrieks]

98. Zinnia huddles next to Babette, eyes fearful. He holds the knife used to cut him with one hand. He shakes Babette’s shoulder with his other.

Zinnia

Stand! Please, stand up! Let us go!

[beat]

I’ll find Mamma. Where did you part?

99. Babette shakes her head. Zinnia’s lip shakes.

Babette

Mamma isn’t here.

100. Babette’s vision blurred as she took stock of where the witch was. The witch was cradling her bleeding hand while trying to keep a grip on her wand. She was gritting her teeth, glaring at Babette and Zinnia.

101. Babette tries to stand, but falls back to her knee. Her hand releases the cameo broach.

Babette

Run, Zin.

102. Zinnia holds his bleeding arm to Babette’s mouth. Babette turns her head away.

Zinnia

Lick it.

103. Zinnia touches his wound with a finger.

104. Zinnia forcefully stuck his finger in Babette’s mouth.

105. Babette knocks his hand away, spits uselessly.

106. Babette’s pupils dilate. She stops breathing roughly. She is no longer weakened.

107. Babette snatches her cameo as she stands, holding it out and drawing a circle as she does. A bright bolt of light bounces off the invisible shield as it is drawn.

108. Babette launches a counter, fire burning on her skin before she shoots it.

109. Fire rips across the ceiling, walls, and floor. The beds are on fire. The books burn up. The witch stands in the middle, frantically waving her wand at the flames to keep them at bay.

110. Babette swirled her hand above her head, gathering the heat and smoke. Crackles of electricity appeared in the growing cloud.

111. The cloud burst and dispersed as Babette stumbled. Her hands dropping to her sides and her breathing harder.

112. The witch was still fighting the flames, but most were now out. Her stamina was weakened but miles above Babette’s.

113. Babette’s eyes dart to the knife in Zinnia’s hand.

114. Babette grabs the knife and jumps at the witch.

Babette

Shut your eyes, Zinnia!

115. Babette plunges the knife into the witch’s neck where it meets her shoulder.

116. Babette is sprayed with blood as she pulls and rips the knife out.

117. Babette stumbles away, grabs Zinnia, and half falls out of the room.

118. Babette ushers Zinnia towards the stairs, now leaning heavily on him. Zinnia supports Babette around her waist and holds her arm.

Zinnia

You killed—.

119. Babette pushes Zinnia away to throw up.

120. Babette wipes her mouth, smearing the blood that sprayed on her face.

Babette

There was little choice.

[beat]

Let us get you home. I’ll face consequences after.

121. Babette and Zinnia made their way to the first floor, passing the body of the Matriarch down the grand stairs.

122. Babette wretches open the front door.

Arlene (o.s.)

BABETTE! WHERE ARE YOU?

Babette

Arlene…

123. Babette forces Zinnia outside, handing him the knife.

Babette

Wait for me. I’ll just be a minute.

124. Babette shuts the door between her and Zinnia as she hurries back into Halcyon Hall.

125. Babette cups her hand to her mouth.

Babette

ARLENE!

Arlene (o.s.)

BABETTE?

126. Babette hurries towards the direction of Arlene’s yell, seeing broken and burned pictures and decorative end tables. There were few bodies maimed by magic—two—with signs blood or burnt fabrics to indicate injured had retreated.

127. Arlene was on a decorative wooden bench, legs sprawled out and out of breath. Her hood was off and singed. She was dirty, scuffed, damp.

128. Babette crouched in front of her.

Babette

Thank God! Are you injured?

Arlene

I believe just exhausted. Did you find him?

129. Babette nods and pulls Arlene up.

Babette

He’s out front. We should hurry.

130. Babette helps Arlene back towards the front entrance.

Babette

I will never stop repaying you for your help in rescuing Zinnia. I know you crossed lines—.

Arlene

I’d rather not think on that right now.

131. Babette and Arlene shuffle towards the doors.

Babette

Of course. But, I will not forget this once I lead the coven. I promise.

132. Doors bang upstairs freezing Babette and Arlene in place by the door.

133. Babette yanks the door open, shoving Arlene in front of her.

Babette

Hurry!

134. Babette shuts the door behind her but does not move further. She freezes with her hand on Arlene’s shoulder.

135. Babette’s eyes widen.

136. Arlene was shock-still, wide eyes staring at the knife in her chest. Zinnia held the handle. His eyes wider but expression otherwise neutral.

137. Zinnia rips out the knife. Babette falls with Arlene to the ground, trying to hold her upright.

Babette

Arlene! Hold on, I’ll… I’ll…

138. Babette fumbles her cameo.

Babette

Zin, I need…

139. Zinnia is staring down. Remorseless.

Babette (o.s.)

Zinnia…?

140. Babette drops Arlene as she shoves herself away from Zinnia’s knife, hitting up against the doors.

141. Babette snatches up her cameo and stabs it into her hand with gritted teeth. Glowing power surges from the area, flickering.

142. The glow fades as Babette tries to stand.

143. Babette slides back to the stones, breathing heavy.

144. Zinnia stands above her, her vision fading in and out.

145. Blackness. Thud of Babette falling over.

Zinnia (o.s.)

Sorry, Babs.

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As Christopher breaks above the surface and takes in a breath of air, Sapphyre peeks out of the water with him. 

Chris: These gills are still here, even now. Perhaps they won’t go away?

Phyre: I don’t know. I’ve never used this power before; I’ve heard it was used long ago to rescue humans from drowning, but when humans began to look for and exploit merkind… we are not supposed to.

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Song: "Love Dance"

Phyre: (remains turned away) I... I was not always a mermaid.

Chris: What do you mean?

Phyre: (looks over her shoulder) I was a human once. But I was captured. I was made to become who I am now. I woke up in a strange facility with no memory of who I was before–only that I was created... and that I was their prisoner.

Chris: Oh, Phyre–how? Why? Who would do such a thing?

Phyre: I don't know...

Chris: Then... how did you come to be here?

Phyre: (gazes to the surface) One of the men in the facility... he was kind to me. He helped me escape one night. I don't know what became of him, but I owe him my life... this life. Lady Aria found me hiding at the edge of the kelp forest. She took me in, brought me to the Enclave, and I learned how to become a mermaid. I tried to fit in... I tried to make friends and find a home...

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Phyre: ...Underwater?

Chris: Wherever you are...

They kiss, gently, then grow passionate. Sapphyre's tail curls around his legs, swirling them in the water between the tall strands of kelp and the surface of the water.

Phyre: I want to be wherever you are. Wherever you go–whatever you do...

Chris: Phyre... Sapphyre... I will go nowhere without you. 

Their foreheads touch. 

Chris: ...I love you.

Phyre's eyes open wide, only to drop closed as she holds him tighter.

Phyre: I love you too. 

 

Song: "Battlefield"

Voice: There!!

In Christopher's arms, Phyre gazes across the top of the kelp forest to find Lady Aria and a host of merkind approaching. They are dressed in crude armor and have weapons and shields, ready for battle.

Looking the opposite way, Christopher sees the Shark King and his army taking their place behind him. They also carry weapons and are covered in armor.

They at once pull apart to glance between the two groups, who approach until their lines are mere feet from each other–with Sapphyre and Christopher in between.

King: So! It IS true! You have been planning war!

Aria: And it is true that you have taken one of our own!

King: I have taken no one–YOU have sent your spy!

Keiki: And you have joined forces with the humans to attack us!

Aria: We have sent no spies! We have no allegiance with humans!

King: Then, who is this??

Chris: (boldly) I am Christopher–I am not a spy, and neither is Sapphyre! She saved me from drowning, and we have taken protection among the Kelp-Dwellers so that I may learn her ways!

Aria: Sapphyre–is this true? We thought you had been taken!

Phyre: It is true–I am sorry, Lady Aria. I did not realize I had caused so much concern…

Aria: You are one of us, my dear Phyre!

Kalli: Please–please come back home!

Sapphyre: (moved to tears) And… and Christopher?

Aria: He is welcome, too, if he wishes to remain here.

Sapphyre and Christopher look at each other and smile gratefully.

King: (incredulously) All of this has been… a misunderstanding??

Iolana: (nervously to Otieno) What are we to do now?? The King will have us beheaded!!

Otieno: (panicking, yells above the crowd) I–I don’t believe them! Why would they show up in full armor? Why would they be ready to fight??

Others chime in similarly.

Phyre: (Turning to the sharks) Please, we mean no harm to you or your kind!

Keiki: Lies!!

King: Keiki!!

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Aria & King: No!!

Other merkind rush forward in retaliation as other sharks do the same. The chaos of battle at once erupts in the waters between the surface and the kelp forest.

During the battle, Christopher wields a spear and tries to fight, but without fins, he’s slow in the water and not much use. Iolana targets him, disarms him, and reels back to stab him with her own spear–only for Sapphyre to rush in his place. She is stabbed (the part where the song drops to just choir for a moment–chills, I tell you), but then struggles to continue fighting, wounding Iolana and driving her away.

As Sapphyre loses strength from her bleeding side, Christopher begins to lose his gills and struggles to get to the surface. They reach each other moments before the battle envelopes them. It rages on until shouts break the chaos.

King: No!!

Aria: Stop!!

At once, the two lines draw back to find Keiki has fallen. Filled with sorrow, the Shark King collects his son in his arms and cries with grief. Aria calls out for Sapphyre, but none can find her. When all realize what has happened and see what has been done–fallen bodies floating lifelessly as the wounded cower in the kelp among the kelp-dwellers–all slowly back away.

Sapphyre and Christopher are nowhere to be seen.

 

Song: “Aftermath”

As a mournful song fills the scene, Shael, his arm bandaged, and Kalli slowly drift near the kelp forest. A few merpeople are huddled on the outskirts, mending wounds and mourning losses.

Shael’s eyes find something on the ground. With horrified sorrow, he finds Sapphyre and Christopher lifeless at the sea floor. Christopher’s gills are gone, and Sapphyre’s body is torn, but they lie together, holding each other in their final moments.

Shael bows sorrowfully as Kalli joins his side and mourns, but when he looks up, he almost believes he sees Sapphyre and Christopher smiling at him from the edge of the kelp-forest. When he blinks again, he sees them no more.

Slowly, they turn and swim away.

 

………It’s a SAD ENDING. But the music is SAD! I didn’t know what to do with it! I think that contributed to why I stopped writing this one (also it’s really not a very complex plot or story or dialog or anythingggg…)

Ironically, I have since seen KA in Vegas, and the real story only has slightly more depth (it’s all pantomime and acrobatics)–but there’s also twice as many songs, AND it ends happily for the main characters. The evil village’s son gets killed in the battle and that ends the war, so I apparently got that part right. But the soundtrack doesn’t have the finale song, so here we are.

Anyway, hope you enjoyed that random trip down my memory lane!

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Sapphyre: A Tale - Part 4
Unfinished Comic Concept

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Song: "Threat"

Shael searches for Sapphyre... and finds her necklace at the edge of the kelp forest.

Kalli: Lady Aria! I've spoken to everyone! No one has seen Phyre!

Aria: Then it has been DAYS since she has been seen!

Kalli: She was alone a lot, but never for this long!


Brief time skip! I actually swapped 2 of the songs in the order on the album... hope no one notices :D

 

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Kalli: ...And I have to wonder... if it was my fault... I was rude to her... I shouldn't have said what I did. It's hard for her because... because of her... heritage.

Aria: (consolingly) Kallista, dear...

Shael: Lady Aria!!

Aria: Shael! What is it?

Shael: I... I found this...

Kalli: The necklace for Phyre!

Shael: ...Near the kelp forest.

Aria: ...No!

Kalli: You... you don't think...

Shael: I fear the SHARKS have taken her...

Kalli: Lady Aria-what should we do?

 

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Aria: ...We cannot risk war... we are not certain she was taken.

Kalli: Even if she doesn't think she is, she is still one of us.

Aria: ...And we will fight for her.

The scene transitions to the other side of the kelp forest.

Shark King: Otieno! Iolana!

Otieno: Sir.

Shark King: ...Where have you two been?

Otieno: We were scouting, sir. Like you said to. Patrolling the kelp forest and the outskirts of the Merkind's realm.

Iolana: And we found a MERMAID in the kelp forest.


Dorian as the scarred and bitter Shark King fits surprisingly well, hah. But do I remember his name? I do not.

 

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King: A mermaid?

Iolana: Yes... we have reason to believe she is a scout sent to spy on us.

Keiki: She's right!!

King: Keiki...

Keiki: But Father–

King: One mermaid alone is not a threat.

Iolana: She had a HUMAN with her.

King: ...Go on.

Iolana: This one is always alone... until now. It could be the merkind are using humans to better plan an attack!

Keiki: Father, we must do something! We must retaliate!

King: We cannot be so quick to fight, my son... To engage the Merkind in battle will mean casualties on both sides, and we are still recovering our numbers.


Keiki looks like he may be based on Henri from the Elemental Guardians fanfic who later grew up to become Phoenix in ToAG. Also still no one seems to be baffled by why a human is underwater but ok!

 

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King: However... if what you say is true, it would be best to prepare than to be caught off guard.

Keiki: So we will fight them?

Iolana: Should we prepare for war?

King: Yes. Prepare for war. But if there is no threat... (gazes at Iolana and Otieno) ...it will be on YOUR heads.

Iolana's form mirrors Sapphyre as they gaze blankly onward.

Chris: Phyre! (cozies up to her) Still as elusive as ever.

Phyre: I was waiting for you.

Chris: I suppose I did say I wanted to come up for air again.

The two swim up to the surface, past the edge of the kelp forest.


….AND that's all that's drawn. I'll try to fill in the rest of the story as best as I can remember using the music in one last part!

 

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Song: "Pursuit"

Iolana: Otieno, would you look at that!

Otieno: Iolana, I see it... though it's awfully hard to believe...

Iolana: The mermaid has returned... and she's brought a two-legged friend with her... And now's the time we finally pay her a visit.

The sharks emerge from hiding.

Otieno: Well! Look here!

Iolana: The lone mermaid again separated from her companions!

Phyre: Sharks!

Otieno: That's right, but if you're nice we may let you go...

Phyre: You can't do anything to me–we're at peace!

Otieno: You're alone... who's gonna know?


Iolana and Otieno are Dawn and Ed if you couldn't tell, lol. I think I looked up all kinds of water-related names for the characters; they’re all very unique. Also I love how no one questions how a human is underwater like this.

 

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Chris: I don't believe she is alone!

Iolana: (jealously) Yes, Otieno, I don't believe she IS...

She swims closer to Christopher.

Iolana: You, however, HUMAN, would make a fine trophy... A proper tribute to the Shark King... So, while we're at it, we might as well bring him a mermaid SPY!

Phyre: You'd call me a spy, would you? The only way you'd do that... is if you could have caught me!


Oh… the “plot”... LOL

 

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Otieno: I knew they'd bolt!

Iolana: Shut up!!

Chris: Up ahead–we can hide in there!

Phyre: The kelp forest? But that's the division between our land and the sharks!

Chris: It doesn't look like the sharks are following boundary lines at the moment.

Phyre: Good point.

Otieno: They're going in the kelp forest!

Iolana: That'll slow them down!

They swim away as the sharks follow after, leaving Sapphyre's necklace behind.

 

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As Sapphyre and Christopher–and Iolana and Otieno–make their way through the kelp forest, they get caught in the vines.

Phyre: They're going to catch us–

Llyr: No they won't–come this way!

He hides them away in the kelp.

Iolana: Wh–where are they?? We couldn't have lost them!

Otieno: I don't see them up ahead... Maybe they've gone back the other way!


Vance makes his leafy-sea-dragon debut!

 

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Llyr: Good, they turn away.

Sapphyre notices Christopher has a hand on her shoulder and they nervously part.

Llyr: You are safe for now, though they may return.

Chris: Thank you, sir, we truly appreciate it... May I ask who–who you are?

Llyr: Oh! I apologize... I am Llyr, and you are in the realm of the Kelp-Dwellers!

 

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Song: "Forest"

Kambu: Ah! Welcome! Llyr, thank you for guiding these two. I am Kambu, leader of the Kelp-Dwellers.

Phyre: (shyly) I'm Phyre. And this is Christopher.

Kambu: A pleasure. It has been some time since we have seen a mermaid--or a greater expanse since we've seen a human. How is it you breathe underwater?

Chris: Well–

Phyre: I've never heard of Kelp-Dwellers before.

Kambu: Ah, because we live in secret. We are found when we need to be found.

Chris: Actually, Llyr found us.

Kambu: We do find those who need us if necessary!


Leafy Mioko and Raeya! 

 

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Kambu: Llyr is young, but he knows what he is doing.

Kelp Queen: You are free to stay as long as you wish.

Kambu: All are welcome! No one is turned away!

Chris: I believe we should stay awhile, don't you think?

Phyre: But what about you? Don't you need to return to the surface?

Chris: I'll let you know when I'm ready to return. Let's enjoy this peaceful place for now... together.


I don't remember the Kelp Queen/Raeya's name…

 

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Sapphyre and Christopher find themselves getting closer...

But Iolana and Otieno are unable to find them.

Otieno: Come on, Iolana, we're not going to find them.

Iolana: ...Fine.

They swim away, reluctantly.


That was a quick falling in love sequence, lol. It’s like the whole story was put on 2x speed (or more lol).

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